Always Together (Revised Version).pdf (45.5 KB)
Logline: After losing his best friend in a horrible accident, a young boy discovers a way to bring her back, but must make a heavy choice.
Vote: https://www.kinolime.com/screenplays/always-together-short
Very good logline
Dear Adarsh,
maybe feature something more spiritual or spook-tastic as the cause of the accident rather than just racing around. Carefully trim the dialogue as there’s a lot that’s not needed to leave room for remembered flashback montages. Also format as SUPER Two months later.
You also should foreshadow Tom and Anne being close before as it reads to me a bit like on-the-rebound. A good inventive first draft.
All best -