"It's ODD_Some dreams don’t let you wake up"

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It’s ODD_Short film Script_SWA_06-09-25.pdf (4.6 MB)

If you are a ’ Daydreamer’, do you mind go through this intriguing short script about a psychological disorder and share your honest feedback.

Logline: Haunted by obsessive daydreams, a young psychology student turns to treatment, but the dream world she enters proves far more dangerous than the life she wants to escape.

Thanks in advance.

cheers
DocJay.

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Dear DocJay,
maybe Maanasa’s heartbeat can pound double time to the ticking clock as the counting girl whispers counts in the background.
Her first line should be “Apologies for missing my appointment with DR etc” but you are showing she is scatterbrained/ confused.
The coffee scenes are lost on me - if it had more to do with her medication or cognitive therapy class/experiences. . . .
It needs a better resolve as it sort of just stops IMHO. Best –

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Thank you very much for reading and sharing your valuable feedback.
Cheers